http://poetrywithmeaning.com/poems/show/3994 Brought to you by Poetry with meaning en <p>This is so beautiful and sad. The rhyme scheme is all good, untill you break it the 2nd stanza after the ~ . You should try to fix that, and the ones after that, then it will give an even better chill. I really love the 'but the clouds stood still that day'. That line all by itself makes this a really promising poem.</p> Tue, 26 Jun 2007 03:26:41 -0700 http://poetrywithmeaning.com/poems/show/3994 http://poetrywithmeaning.com/poems/show/3994 <p>simply heartbreaking...as a mother...I hope I never have to endure that kind of pain...=(</p> Fri, 13 Jul 2007 19:23:00 -0700 http://poetrywithmeaning.com/poems/show/3994 http://poetrywithmeaning.com/poems/show/3994